User:Madisonrteen/sandbox

= Possible Article Selection and Evaluation: =

=== Retail Apocalypse ===


 * Lacks information for causes
 * The first paragraph is quite broad. It lists many factors that led to the retail apocalypse, but it does not go into much detail, leaving the reader overwhelmed and a bit confused as to how these factors may have contributed to the retail apocalypse.
 * The third paragraph introduces the "IHL Group," but it does not state what this group is or what credentials it may have.
 * The lead section is quite lengthy. To make it more concise, I would categorize some of this information into the articles contents, such as history or factors.

=== Cloth Modeling ===


 * Lacks information and references
 * This article is very short. More research and information could be provided to enhance the article.
 * I would change some of the grammar choices made in the article. For instance, I would take out the semicolon and replace it with a comma in this sentence: "Cloth modeling is the term used for simulating cloth within a computer program; usually in the context of 3D computer graphics."
 * The section titled "Background" only speaks of the physics behind cloth modeling. To help readers have a better understanding of the background of cloth modeling, I would go into detail about how and when cloth modeling came about and its relation to the advancement of technology over the last five or ten years.
 * Why is there so little information on a technique involving technology, a rapidly and ever-changing development?
 * I am a little distracted by the "science" and "physics" behind cloth modeling provided in the article. Having more information as to how cloth modeling impacts consumers, as well as producers/suppliers, would be beneficial.

=== Retailers Affected by the Apocalypse ===


 * Lacks detail
 * The article is labeled as a C on the quality scale, meaning it contains a significant amount of information but still needs vital information and organization.
 * To improve this article, I would cut the lists shorter and only list stores that are popular in the U.S.
 * I like that it provides various external links; however, it is very distracting to readers. An overall cleanup of the article is much needed.

= Final Article Selection and Editing: =

Cloth modeling

 * I have chosen to edit this article for my assignment
 * Changed a grammatical error in the first sentence by replacing the semicolon with a comma
 * I included the definition of cloth as the first sentence in the lead section
 * I included a first name and link to a biography for André Weil

= References: =