User:Mads1978/Memot Circular Earthworks/Westontengan1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mads1978/Memot_Circular_Earthworks?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
In the lead paragraph, there are spelling mistakes and the title of the final section is also misspelled. After reading the lead paragraph, I do not feel satisfied in saying that I understood the importance of the information in the article. The last sentence is a fragment and I can not get a clear picture of what you were trying to say. The lead needs to give more clarity on the definition of earthwork because it is a hard thing to picture if you have never seen it. The three paragraphs that are on the page are do not seem to have any structure or chronology issues. The length of each paragraph is consistent throughout, however the features paragraph needs to be expanded beyond three short sentences. There are three references by Michael Dega and three references by Albrecht Gern throughout the article which may lead one to think that their opinions are a significant portion of the article information. There are a few instances of using non neutral words or phrases like the worst mostly in the first paragraph. The article does not make claims on behalf of unnamed groups of people and focuses more on positive information.