User:Madunn99/Endosymbiont/CWbiology Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Madunn99


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Madunn99/Endosymbiont?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Endosymbiont

Evaluate the drafted changes
The proposed changes are great edits and improvements to the existing article. The information is easier to read. The section on marine invertebrates needs to be rephrased. It needs more details in order to actually understand the relationship between the two organisms. There currently is a lack of connection. There are a lot of examples in the original article of relationships in invertebrates, but there is only one listed for vertebrates. Edits state that there are fewer, but is this the only example? This section could be expanded. Overall, the proposed edits are very good. Continue looking over the main article to make the phrasing more user friendly. Some sections need similar edits. For example, the last sentence in the secondary endosymbiont section: Many other insects have secondary endosymbionts not reviewed here. Should this be included? The reader is left wondering what these other insects could be.