User:MagicBrownMan/Rifleman's Creed/Zpana44 Peer Review

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MagicBrownMan


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Rifleman's Creed


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Rifleman's Creed

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think your article is very straight to the point and gives a great description of what the Riflemans creed is!

lead:The lead is short and sweet! I think you did a wonderful job at giving a description of what the creed is, but it may be beneficial to add a little more information about the background of the creed.

Content: the content is relevant to your topic and its great how you added the actual rifleman creed. I think that is a very important part of you article. If I wanted to look of the creed I wouldn't just want the history on it, I would want the actual words to the creed so great job! I do think however it would be cool to maybe find some examples of the creed being used in media or maybe go into depth a little bit more about how it was created and why it is so significant to marine psychology and respect.

Tone & Balance: I think the article does a great job at staying as neutral as possible. I like how you mentioned that it used to be required but the past couple of years it has been less mandatory and not as important as it once was. This to me shows an equal balance. You never once said either was bad or good and that's what I think is important for neutrality in an article. I think it would be beneficial to mention a little bit more about it originally and how it is now, you do a good job at giving us the status of the creed but maybe mention why it became less important?

Sources & References: References look great! All the sources I clicked on opened and work! They all seem accurate and secondary! The sources do support what is written in the article.

Organization: Again I think your article is short and sweet and to the point and I like how you give the description first, then give us the actual creed. Like I said before I think your article would benefit from a bit more information. You don't really have sections because of the length of the article maybe that's something you would like to consider!

Images & Media: You do not have any images on your article. I think it would be beneficial to find 1 or 2 images that had to do with the marines. Although it might not explain much about the creed I think it would be nice for there to be maybe a marine symbol or a picture of marines or even a photo of marines saying the creed?

New article: Yes, the article has more than 3 secondary accurate sources, I think the list is diverse but maybe there could be a couple more different types of sources. There aren't any inboxes or section headings because of the short length of the article, that's why I think it would help if you just made the article a little longer. Yes the article has multiple other links underneath it that are very similar kinds of searches like the rifleman creed.

Overall Impression: I think your article is good but can be a little better. I think the information you already have is awesome and gets to the point quickly. I think the short length of your article is holding you back from checking off some necessary things that wikipedia says makes a good article. if you added a little more information you could break things up and apply things to different sections.

(Reviewer: Zoe Panagoulias)