User:MahHdz01/LGBT history in Chile/Ariel.Gman Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MahHdz01


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:MahHdz01/LGBT_history_in_Chile?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * LGBT history in Chile
 * LGBT history in Chile

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

- The lead has been updated in a way to properly describe the article, especially since the original article does not have a Lead section. It is concise in a way that describes what will be included within the entirety of the article but does not give too much detail in a way of drawing out or over complicating the writing.

Content:

- The author has gone through the original article and adjusted the grammar in order to make it more politically correct.

- Their information is all up-to-date after reviewing the citations and confirming that the information is correct.

- The topic in specific is included within Wikipedia's equity gaps, the topic is that of LGBT and this is a minority group, meaning less people have discussed this topic and it contains information that needs more monitoring.

Tone and Balance:

- The tone of the draft is neutral as the information taken is straight from the original article and correctly cited additions have been added. - There is no bias but there are specific concentrations on two topics, i.e, Colonialism, Military dictatorship (1973–1990). Choosing these two sections will allow them to devote more time to make sure the Information included will be not only correct but completed to its fullest extent.

Sources and References:

- Has added three or more additional sources which is great because it brings in more broad and greater knowledge to the topic.

- They reflect the literature within the original article have found new sources that expand on the topic.

Organization:

The organization is basic but well formatted.

With the inclusion of internal linked words it will allow future readers to access the information more easily than having to search the topic, word, or person separately.

Overall Impressions:

- Looks good, the information is strong and is following an outline to keep within the focused content.