User:Mahna Mahna Muppet/Clarence King/LeeLaiben Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mahna Mahna Muppet and Audrey Metcalfe


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:Mahna Mahna Muppet/Clarence King - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Clarence King - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Firstly, the way you've laid out the sandbox is very helpful. I can clearly tell which edits are new and what has been changed from the original. Second, your edits are incredibly well thought out and well executed. They are detailed and provide plenty of useful information. My only note might be to divide the large blocks of text into smaller paragraphs. This would make them easier to read. Other than that, very well done!

Relooking at my work I see what you mean about the large block texts being hard to read and maybe overwhelming. So, that is definitely something I can fix to make it more readable. -Mahna Mahna Muppet

That's a really good suggestion. We'll make sure to make our additions more readable for the viewers because that is very important. -Audrey Metcalf