User:Mahna Mahna Muppet/Evaluate an Article

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Elizabeth Carne - Wikipedia

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I am interested in women in geology plus the lead section said she was also a natural philosopher which has no mention in the article so that is something I could add.

Evaluate the article
Lead section:

the introductory sentence is not bad however it mentions information not touched on in the article

I would say the lead is concise but maybe a little too concise.

It does mention what topics would be covered but the article break up does not match the lead

Content:

talks about her banking under the geology section

the notable ideas section only talks about geology so should probably be renamed

has a brief section about gender bias in science

Tone and balance:

article is has a neutral tone its content is what needs the most work

Sources and References:

things could be sourced more often

there are quite a few sources all with different publish dates and from different authors

some of the sources were written by women

references 2 and 6's links don't work

not a whole lot of reliable sources pop up when I just internet search her most of what comes up is about the historical fiction book based on her life

more articles come up when I use google scholar

Organization and writing quality:

this article needs some reorganizing.

some of the language need to be clarified. I had to reread some parts to make sure I understood what the editor was trying to convey

Images and Media:

there is only a singular drawing of Elizabeth Carne

It is captioned okay but there is no info about the drawing itself like how old she is in it

Talk Page Discussion:

this page is part of 4 wikiprojects: Biography, Geology, Cornwall, and Woman Scientists

the page only says start a discussion, so it appears there have been no discussions on this article

Overall Impressions:

the article is rated start class of low importance

the article neutral informing tone is consistent, and the biography section has a fair bit of information

this article needs to make sure the lead matches the sections, it needs to be reorganized, more information added on topics such as her natural philosophy, some parts need to be rewritten for readability, more media should be added if possible

the article is not awful so I would say its underdeveloped