User:Maiab3/Federal Way Public Schools/Smaxine1 Peer Review

General info
Maiab3
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Maiab3/Federal_Way_Public_Schools?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Federal Way Public Schools
 * Federal Way Public Schools

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall you did a great job of summarizing the historical background of Federal Way Public Schools, which is important for giving the audience more context. I was impressed by your writing because it articulates the topic in a concise and effective way. Lead


 * The lead was not updated from what I could tell when looking at the sandbox draft vs. the live article. It doesn't look like the author copied the entire article/entire lead into the sandbox.

Content


 * For the beginning of the historical subtopic, it reflects the content clearly and introduces the subtopic. The content added is very relevant to the topic as it describes migration, population, and school districts during the time of its development.
 * It does not address equity gaps or mention underrepresented groups in the history subtopic.

Tone and Balance


 * The content added has neutral tone that appear to not be biased.
 * Content does not "persuade" the audience in a particular way.

Sources and References


 * The sources are reliable secondary sources that are necessary for this article. However some of the references is not up to date because when I click on it, it takes me to a "404-Page Not Found" page or an "Error" page. I'm not sure if it's something wrong on my end, Wikipedia's, or if the sites are out of date.

Organization


 * The content is easy to read and concise, while also informing the reader about important facts. The content is also well organized because of the usage of headings, paragraphs, and citations. It doesn't appear that the sandbox draft has any grammatical errors.

Images and Media


 * No images or media were added by the author