User:Mailesittler/Factors associated with being a victim of sexual violence/H3lpful4all779 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Mailesittler


 * Link to draft you're reviewing: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mailesittler/Factors_associated_with_being_a_victim_of_sexual_violence?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Factors associated with being a victim of sexual violence
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Factors associated with being a victim of sexual violence

Evaluate the drafted changes
The content you added was really well-written. It felt a bit choppy, so if you are able to add some more cohesion/flow between sentences to try and tie everything you are stating together I think that would be a huge help in improving your article edits. You wrote in a very non-bias and factual way which was perfect, and the content felt right on point with the topic of the larger article. Maybe increase some of the insights you are writing on, in particular on the impacts of the information you provided, but otherwise, amazing job.