User:Mak345/Home (Morrison novel)/Ecday2 Peer Review

General info
Mak345
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Mak345/Home_(Morrison_novel)&action=edit&section=4
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Home (Morrison novel)
 * Home (Morrison novel)

Evaluate the drafted changes
- Lead is updated and has a nice explanation of the general plot of the book. May need more information about what is to come in the rest of the article.

- War and Trauma

Make sure to say who each character is, like “Mike” and “Stuff.”

The section about the little girl is a bit confusing. I would rearrange/add some information that connects these scenes to your section heading. How does the girl connect to his trauma?

- Racism

“Executive Order” shouldn’t be capitalized.

This section has a great summary of the beginning of the book! I would use some of your work here to create a short plot summary that goes before your Themes section. It would help the reader to understand the plot before they try and analyze it.

Make sure to say who “Cee” and “the Scotts” are.

- Family

First sentence of this section is pretty weird grammatically. (Example: “The relationship between….”what?, etc.) I’d go for a general grammar check before this is published—Grammarly is great and I think its still free.

- Characters

This section looks great. I would definitely put it before the Themes section so people know who your analyses are talking about (I didn’t! :D). I do think a plot summary section is still needed. Otherwise, your readers won’t understand what’s going on in this section or understand character motivations and choices.