User:Maka'alaKaono/Retjenu/Traven Murphy Peer Review

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Maka'alaKaono
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Maka'alaKaono/Retjenu
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Retjenu :

Evaluate the drafted changes
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very thorough. similar ideas to what I had, we both had issues with how certain things within our articles were. I am curious to see how structuring quotes within the 12th dynasty part goes, there were more than plenty amounts of quotes and this may be an ambitious task. that being said, so far your notes for how you plan to update and improve the article is already impressive so i don't doubt you'll be able to. everything seemed relevant and up to date, and everything seems to be organized so far! as for the nineteenth dynasty part, I would suggest if you're unsure about including a source and if Retjenu isn't directly used, it may not be a source to be used. aside from that, very interesting draft and I'm excited to see the final project!