User:Mallard23/Diabetes Susceptibility in Japanese Populations/Frankie2359 Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
This was a great article full of interesting information. I made some grammatical edits and tweaked a few sentences for flow. I broke up some paragraphs to make sections easier to read (rather than one long paragraph under a section) and recommended adding wiki links to certain topics. The article goes right into the first topic, I’m not sure if a lead needs to be added? Either way, good article! -KJ