User:Mandymelville/User experience design/ECM0815 Peer Review

General info
Mandymelville
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Mandymelville/User experience design
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):User experience design

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * I like how the drafted part of the article is broken into smaller paragraphs, as it feels easy to comprehend the information. I highly recommend using this format for the rest of your edits.


 * The sources are exactly the kind we're looking for and very relevant to the topic.


 * Language feels plain enough that the average reader (someone unfamiliar with user experience design) can follow along. The main article, on the other hand, does contain quite a bit of professional jargon, and since I don't know if it was you who used it or not, I won't point that out as a fault of yours. But I do recommend converting more of the article, especially the lead, to more plain language if possible.


 * I don't see any bias, but I would recommend rephrasing the line "every design is evolving" (unless it's a direct quote from a source) to something more along the lines of "designs constantly evolve" or "designs are constantly evolving." If those don't sound right, you could use an in-text citation right after it to make sure it doesn't sound too generalized.


 * Overall, I certainly think the added information is relevant and helpful, just make sure the plain language is applied to the rest of the article.