User:Mango37836/Human migration/FlowerandFeast Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mango37836


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mango37836/Human_migration?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Human migration

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * I really like how you added an entire new section that branches from human migration. Human migration is obviously really broad and it is helpful to see it broken down into subtopics. Everything is relevant, but I think some sentences could be reorganized to be less distracting. The example at the end of the first paragraph felt a little out of place or could use some sort of transition so it is less abrupt. It would also be helpful to define what an "end-goal country" is!
 * The tone is neutral and remains unbiased by examining scholars from both sides of the debate. However, it would be nice to see a little more elaboration on this debate as I felt that it jumped from each one pretty fast. It would also be helpful to make distinguishable where the divide is as I found it confusing what exactly the debate was. For example, stating "Some scholars...Other scholars..." The references are really good, everything is cited where it should be and all the sources seem up to date. The sources seem relatively unbiased and scholarly.
 * The tone is neutral and remains unbiased by examining scholars from both sides of the debate. However, it would be nice to see a little more elaboration on this debate as I felt that it jumped from each one pretty fast. It would also be helpful to make distinguishable where the divide is as I found it confusing what exactly the debate was. For example, stating "Some scholars...Other scholars..." The references are really good, everything is cited where it should be and all the sources seem up to date. The sources seem relatively unbiased and scholarly.