User:Manofthewater/Incel/Vanessaamartinez Peer Review

General info
Manofthewater
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Manofthewater/Incel
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Incel

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * *The questions are derived from the "Peer review checklist" on the Peer Review assignment.*
 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * The information presented in the draft is relevant to the topic for the most part, but some sentences seemed like they were added in with no basis. For instance, the part regarding heterosexuality could use a bit of elaboration. How exactly does heterosexuality play into the views of men who are considered incels? Similarly, what aspects of technology and evolution of the human mind are related to incel culture?
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * The beginning sentence sounds like it's somewhat of an opinion, seeing as there's no source to back up the claim that "the incel is known to be a weak man in today's society." The rest seems to be described neutrally, with citations to back up any general claims. However, there are some sentences that carry an unsure tone, like the question "Is it loneliness, or is it something of degeneracy." The ending sentence also sounds unsure. I suggest either removing these sentences or revising them in a way that doesn't leave room for guessing.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * I wouldn't say that there are any views that are either overrepresented or underrepresented.
 * Check the citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * The citation links work, but the sources included are all from Wikipedia. It's necessary to find sources from anthropological sources.
 * Is each fact supported by an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * Although the sources included are relevant to the topic, they are all from Wikipedia. It's necessary to find sources from anthropological sources to ensure reliability and establish notability.
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that should be added?
 * The information doesn't appear to be out of date. Overall, this can be a good introduction defining an incel, but I would work on including reliable anthropological sources, further supporting some of the claims being made, and making small grammatical edits.