User:Manorhe18/Healthcare reform debate in the United States/Cheynehoke Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Manorhe18


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Manorhe18/Healthcare_reform_debate_in_the_United_States?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Healthcare reform debate in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead: I think you could add a more comprehensive lead sentence to introduce the topic.

Conservative and libertarian arguments: This whole section has no citations! Im not sure if this was a tech error or not.

"The AMA and many physicians actively held political roles in preventing many grassroots movements of compulsory health insurance to take hold due to private/ profit incentives as well as a disbelief in “socialism”. "

I think this sentence should maybe be reworded because as a reader I was very confused by it.

"President Truman, who was a strong supporter of the Wagner-Murray-Dingell bill which would instate a national medical insurance program financed by taxes, was elected in the late 1940s and the AMA spent over $1 million on an anti-health reform campaign, denouncing the bill and fueled even more by cold war rhetoric of socialism."

(This sentence is really long and I got lost along the way. Maybe break it up into two to present your ideas more clearly?)

"The republican President Reagan spoke out against Socialized Medicine in which he “criticized Social Security for supplanting private savings and warned that subsidized medicine would curtail Americans' freedom" and that "pretty soon your son will not decide when he is in school, where he will go or what he will do 'for a living." (cite this and ensure the quotations are correct)'

"T''his is important given that the uninsured rate for Americans is still high after the advent of the Affordable Care Act, with a rate of 10.9%, or 28.9 million people in 2019." (cite this)''

"One way in which the US has been addressing this need for a social safety net is through the advent of Free Clinics. The creation of the National Council of Free Clinics reflects not only a need for licensed staff, but serves as filling the gap in healthcare access for primarily uninsured or underinsured populations. The social safety net free clinic"

(Im not sure if you got cut off here but it seems like you started a sentence and didn't finish it. I think this sections is great but it might be a good idea to include substantive proof from data, study stats, or a research study to support the claims you are making)

Overall, I though the article was solid. I definitely needs citations all over but other than that it is neutral, concise, and well-written. I would try to look for some proof to support your claims and reword some of the longer sentences or the ones I highlighted above as confusing.