User:Maraa09/Feminist theory/SarahDorvil84 Peer Review

Peer review
I am reviewing Maraa09's draft,

User:Maraa09/sandbox

I think this topic is a very great topic to work on. I find it very important for people to be aware of the issues that involve social media. Overall I enjoyed reading it and I do have a few suggestions. I do not believe that this user has a lead. The lead as of right now ( I assume the first paragraph) is not very clear. I think social media should be spoken about a little more before introducing social media related to feminism. A little background on social media, the key use for it, and even brief issues surrounding it. After that, the information the user has written would blend a little better and the main topic would be revealed. Also, if possible to have the campaigns and hashtags' spoken about in its own subsection if there is enough information about it. I would love to know more about the campaigns to give me more of an introduction to the rest of the article. The content written by the user works well with the topic at hand. I would suggest looking to rephrasing some paragraphs since some could be more neutral. The article does take a lean towards persuading the reader to one position. The article for right now seems to flow good, but subsections would help to organize the article better and maybe even help go more in-depth with the topics in the article. The article is easy to read, but it does have some minor grammatical issues. As of right now the user has only one source, but later on as the draft is being worked on more sources shouldn't be added.