User:Maradeleonm/Ecuadorian Siona/Frenchsilkpie Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sote2, Jmarie1, Coolisschool123, 23alexx, IntrepidError


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Maradeleonm/Ecuadorian Siona


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ecuadorian Siona

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey! Here's my peer review:

Lead:

The lead has had a substantial amount of new information added; it appears the lead has been rewritten or written entirely new. The lead also has a clear introductory sentence that describes what Ecuadorian Siona is, where it is spoken, dialects, and language family. The lead also describes the main sections that the article intends to discuss, such as phonology and history. However, the body of the article is missing a few aspects discussed in the lead, like an explanation of the villages in which this language resides and mutual intelligibility. Despite this, the lead, in general, is concise as it does not add too much information that is not necessary. Instead, it discusses the brief history, areas of the language, and brief phonology aspects concerning Ecuadorian Siona and Colombian Siona. The only thing that could be improved is to add and expand more in the body of the article what is discussed in the lead since the information in the lead is important to understand this language.

Content:

The content that is present currently appears to be generally relevant to understanding Ecuadorian Siona. There seems to be little information that does not pertain to the topic, but the information is still quite vague as there is only historical background and phonology. The article could incorporate more sections that could potentially discuss the idea of mutual intelligibility further or the distribution of Ecuadrion Siona speakers. There could also be the addition of syntax, morphology, and writing systems, and possibly a section devoted to how other individuals can understand Ecuadirion Siona or how it is different than Colombia Siona but not overshadowing Ecuadorian Siona. Also, the content is up to date because most of the ideas within have been added within the past year or two, but the citations are not as up-to-date. There are many from the late 1900s and the early 2000s, and adding newer documents could help strengthen the article. Finally, the article is related to Wikipedia’s equity gap because the topic is Ecuadorian Siona, a significantly underrepresented language with little background and information describing it. Nevertheless, the information put into the article so far is helping to advance the knowledge of the language much more now than before.

Tone and Balance:

The overall article is neutral. All information within it is not biased in one direction or another. However, although the article is about Ecuadorian Siona, there is also further discussion about Colombian Siona, which helps to understand the dialects but with additional examples. If the decision is made to expand on Colombian Siona, it would be beneficial to add an internal link to another more in-depth article about the language. It should also incorporate some information about the similarity and differences between Ecuadorian and Colombian Siona without underrepresenting the primary language. The article does not try to persuade the reader in one way or another; it plainly explains the language's history and phonology.

Sources and References:

Citations and secondary source information back up some content, but many sentences and phrases are not. Almost sentences should have a citation to back up what the sentence is saying, so I recommend looking into more literature to find where these phrases came from and cite them, especially the newer added content. However, the content appears to be paraphrased well from the sources they came from, and all the sources have something to do with Ecuadorian Siona. However, not many of them have links or DOI, which makes it challenging to find the extent to which the articles are scholarly, but based on the citation, it seems there is little new coverage articles or random websites. As mentioned before, many of the sources are not current, but the ones provided for this class assignment are indeed within the past few years and are reliable. It seems as much information is cited from these provided sources. Most links that I clicked on work. Therefore, the one thing I would say would benefit this article is to provide more links to the citations in the references and links to the article itself. Not only this but give more citations within the body and lead of the article to strengthen the reliability of the content.

Organization:

The content is well written, with no significant spelling or grammatical errors. It is not challenging to read and understand. The added content is broken down into sections, but very little. It would be helpful to the article to add more sections describing other ideas discussed in the lead in depth; as stated, having a section on the syntax of Ecuadorian Siona or a more detailed description of the villages where the language resides can expand the knowledge on the topic.

Images and Media:

No images are provided, but if any are found, such as maps, written documents of the language, or an example of the writing system and flags, it could significantly improve the article. In addition, it will provide more visual media to help readers get a more direct feel for the language.

Overall Impression

Based on the group's sandbox, it seems the article had significantly less than before the addition. However, what was added is highly substantial and provides more insight into the language of Ecuadorian Siona. The article is more complete with the additions but still could use a little more work to add to it further. The strength of the content added and this article is that there is a reasonably extensive improvement to the historical background and the phonology. The content is diverse and expands on various aspects of the language rather than just one. However, the article could be improved by elaborating more on the content, especially the ideas added to the lead. There are ideas in the lead that are not explained in the body. Based on this, more sections could also be added to focus on specific concepts rather than combining everything into one section. Additionally, more citations are needed in the lead and body after the sentences, along with hyperlinks that describe a word or concept that may be unfamiliar to others, such as mutual intelligibility.