User:Marcferda/Belcarra Regional Park/Wsymington Peer Review

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To begin, the Introduction is clear, concise, and easy to read. It provides a well-structured and thought out background, and some historical context for the reader. The introduction touches on the criteria points regarding the goals and history of the protected area, as well as the boundaries and size of the protected area. The only critique I can really make for this section is that it relies heavily on geographic explanation, while the reader may not be familiar with the area. It is not a problem to talk about the geography, but if so, perhaps include a map of the park so the reader can have a bit of spatial awareness, or if not including a map, avoid referencing specific points of interest in the park (i.e. Jug Island).

The cultural and ecological significance section paints a great picture as to the importance, and history of Indigenous peoples on this land. Not only this, but it briefly explains the importance of the Admiralty Point lands in the areas' ecology. It was also to helpful to have some context as to how the agreement between the Tsleil-Wauthuth First Nations and Metro Vancouver might pan out. The only critique I would make are there are a few grammatical errors that could be revisited. For example, "While there are no specific clauses in the agreement, this is so all activities or cultural sites, can be considered in management plans" could definitely be reworded to provide greater clarity for the reader.

The Land Use and wildlife section was perhaps the most effective of the sections included in the article. It was clear, to the point, and short, but still did a sufficient job in explaining the ecological landscape to the reader. This was refreshing, and easy to digest. However, small grammatical errors such as using deers as a plural instead of deer, could be changed. As well as a few small spelling mistakes (ex. confiferous). All in all, very easy to read while still retaining some educational value.

The Conservation section was very educational, and brought to light a lot of things which I had never heard or seen as a relatively frequent visitor to Belcarra. For example, I was unaware cabins were on the Admiralty Point lands until the 1980s, which was an interesting piece of history. My only qualm with the section is that it begins with "The existence of the Admiralty Point Lands set a precedent for the Regional Park System," but does not do a great job explaining what the precedent is. If the second section is an elaboration on this, it could be made slightly clearer for the reader to understand.

All in all, this piece is relatively well-written, seemingly quite neutral and balanced, and does a good job at giving the reader a brief, and greater understanding of Belcarra Regional Park. The only issues I had with were primarily to do with grammar, and structure, all of which can be revisited and changed. I learnt quite a bit from the article, such as the earlier mentioned cabins, as well as the fact that the park hosts approximately 600,000 guests a year ( a lot more than I was expecting!). You could do as well with possibly including a few more sources; four is sufficient, but a greater number of sources used could ensure a fuller understanding of the topic.