User:MarcoGirl/User:Strudel3/sandbox/MarcoGirl Peer Review

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I think you have an interesting topic and are off to a good start! Your draft is well written, is free from grammatical errors, and from what I have looked up, the information you currently have is correct. I think that it is important they you keep citing the information as you write your article and continue to use up to date, reliable sources. Although it is hard to sift through long, dense articles, this will help you accumulate the information you need and create a well supported outline for your article.

I like that you have your subheadings laid out to introduce what the article is about. They are short and specific. Because the beginning paragraph is more of an introduction, I would probably change it to some thing smaller/more general than whole article topic title of "Action Mechanism of Aspirin". Maybe something like "Aspirin's function" or "Aspirin" would be more appropriate. In addition, because you go so in-depth for the mechanisms, I would recommend that you give a little bit more of a basic/generalized introduction as to what aspirin is, generic vs brand name, who can and can't take it, what it is used for, etc. Although I believe a lot of people know what aspirin is, I think that this is a good opportunity to give readers a good base of knowledge before going into the specifics.

From the little that I have looked into your topic, I feel like you could explain more about the how aspirin works in different situations. I see that you are starting with the first couple steps in aspirin metabolism. From how you explained it, I understand that aspirin inhibits the enzyme COX, which leads to the formation of prostaglandins that cause inflammation, swelling, pain and fever. Maybe look into - How is used to treat chronic vs acute inflammation? How does it relate to thromboxane? How does it work based on dosage? A brief explanation on how it differs from Ibuprofen. This may be a good talking point to touch on a further explain that side of aspirin's mechanism.

So far, our article is structured well and has a good tone. It is direct and unbiased. You have been doing a good job keeping a neutral tone and not trying to persuade anyone. I wish I could give you some more advice/feedback, but because you only have a beginning of your draft, there's only so much to go over. I think the most important thing you can do is keep adding on to it. Keep up the good work!