User:Margaretconway1702/Refugee FORA/Annaleah7 Peer Review

General info
I am reviewing, Refugee FORA Wikipedia site.
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Margaretconway1702/Refugee FORA
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * User:Margaretconway1702/Refugee FORA

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead paragraph on their Wikipedia page describes what FORA does in their non-profit organization by giving specific details about its impact on the community. The lead was clear, concise, and easy to understand. There was nothing listed there that was not mentioned on the page. The content is relevant as it illustrates the services they offer at FORA and their impact on the community. The research is from the past four years, so I consider this page up to date. The history section describes the development and improvements that FORA has experienced and contributes to, doing so in a permissible and unambiguous way. I did not get a sense of persuasion in the text. I advise avoiding the word "we" and sticking to third-party pronouns, as some readers might see this as biased. The FORA group did a great job displaying their research into this WIKI page. They found some well-known local platforms like Chicago Tribune and NBC Chicago. For the "Services" section, they might like to make bullet points or organize information using subheadings so that all services are easily identifiable. These changes would help people directly identify what services are offered at Refugee FORA instead of having to read the whole blurb to find out. Overall, one thing they could do to improve their page is to reduce the size of the paragraphs and see how you can break up the text to make them less chunky. The paragraphs are not super long, but maybe some could be split into two paragraphs. Something we could adopt to our own Wikipedia page that Refugee FORA did a great job doing is the headings they have. For example, I liked their impact section, where they talked specifically about the organization's impact on the community and its members. We should also incorporate the "Lead" section into ours. We also need to add more detail and organize our article more strategically.