User:Marge584/Tyrtaeus/Revengemin Button Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Marge584


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Marge584/Tyrtaeus


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Tyrtaeus

Evaluate the drafted changes
1. The Lead Section

The proposed additions of how Tyrtaeus's works survive is valuable, as are the grammar edits, it makes the lead a clear and comprehensive summary of the article.

2. Clarity of Article Structure

Adding a Military Ideology subsection is a great move, since that was a crucial component of his poetry. The Works and Poetry sections could be combined, since the former lists known works by Tyrtaeus, while the latter describes what those works were; perhaps Poetry should be a renamed subsection of Works along with Poetic Style and/or Military Ideology. Moving Sources to go after Birth and Origin fits better as the sections are written now, but organizationally seems jarring, since the article will then proceed Birth and Origin--> Sources --> Sparta. Re-writing the Sources and Birth and Origin sections might work better.

3. Coverage Balance

No balance issues.

4. Content Neutrality

It would probably be good to note that Tarkow and Shay are the ones who interpreted those specific military themes from Tyrtaeus's work.

5. Sources

No issues, though more sources agreeing with Tarkow and Shay would only help.