User:Maria.styron/sandbox

I'm not sure what the best way to format this is, so I'll just list my draft content.

It should be listed under Origin of the construct that Machiavellians are smoother, more convincing liars than those who do not exhibit Machiavellianism, and display less anxiety as well. This could either be its own subsection titled something like Deception, or it could be added under Abilities. Ajwtgm (talk)

Maybe we could add/find more information for the subtopics that have considerably smaller sections. (example-etiology)Jadeynmetcalf (talk) 15:09, 5 April 2022 (UTC)Jadeynmetcalf

Other Sources?Jadeynmetcalf (talk) 15:09, 5 April 2022 (UTC)Jadeynmetcalf Dark Triad

Suggestions?? I think that we should consider rewording this sentence, especially the second half, "Though unrelated to the historical figure or his works, the trait is named after the political philosophy of Niccolò Machiavelli, as psychologists Richard Christie and Florence Geis used edited and truncated statements inspired by his works to study variations in human behaviors." Jadeynmetcalf (talk) 15:30, 5 April 2022 (UTC)Jadeynmetcalf

Also consider explaining and providing sources for information about Niccolò Machiavelli's political philosophy. They said that Machiavellianism was based off of it but it doesn't explain anything at all. It jumps straight into what kind of test they use to determine where people are on the scale. Jadeynmetcalf (talk) 15:30, 5 April 2022 (UTC)Jadeynmetcalf

Could potentially add a brief section about what the dark triad is. All it says is that Machiavellianism is a part of it. It has no background information at all. Jadeynmetcalf (talk) 15:30, 5 April 2022 (UTC)Jadeynmetcalf

We could also see if there are any new and current attributions that psychologists have found. New tests?Jadeynmetcalf (talk) 15:30, 5 April 2022 (UTC)Jadeynmetcalf

Could think about rewording the "Opportunism" section. I think that it sounds a little repetitive and the word usage is a little mediocre. Jadeynmetcalf (talk) 15:30, 5 April 2022 (UTC)Jadeynmetcalf
 * "People high in Machiavellianism will often attempt to achieve their goals by whatever means necessary. This includes things such as bending and breaking rules, cheating, and stealing. They are easily able to switch between working with others and using others to achieve their goals. People high in Machiavellianism do not have the same level of emotions as others. They are more willing to do things seen as heinous and immoral. In the pursuit of their goals, these kinds of people will even go as far as to harm and manipulate others if they think it is beneficial to themselves." - Possible suggestion for "Opportunism" sectionJadeynmetcalf (talk) 15:30, 5 April 2022 (UTC)Jadeynmetcalf

I really like the new last sentence that the person who peer reviewed our article changed in the "abilities" subsection. This is what they put: "There has not been enough research yet to show whether or not high machs are skilled at manipulation, however it has been found thus far, that it is unrelated to cognitive abilities as such."Jadeynmetcalf (talk) 23:35, 5 April 2022 (UTC)Jadeynmetcalf

Add the findings and research behind the "Kiddie Mach" test.Jadeynmetcalf (talk) 23:35, 5 April 2022 (UTC)Jadeynmetcalf

In the introduction paragraph the original author says, "Though unrelated to the historical figure or his works, the trait is named after the political philosophy of Niccolò Machiavelli..." this is not true. Machiavellianism is completely related to Niccolò Machiavelli. He is the one who founded the qualities and tactics that Machiavellians use to manipulate others. Here is a source that backs this claim. Jadeynmetcalf (talk) 17:02, 6 April 2022 (UTC)Jadeynmetcalf

There are also several links to different wikipedia pages that need to be added to certain words and phrases. Examples would include etiology, the dark triad, the italian renaissance, etc...Jadeynmetcalf (talk) 17:05, 6 April 2022 (UTC)Jadeynmetcalf

Possible start to the rewrite of the first paragraph in the "origin of construct" section:
 * "Machiavellianism originated from Italian renaissance writer Niccolò Machiavelli. In Machiavelli’s work The Prince, he described several qualities that a person in power should have if they wanted to gain and keep power.Https://www.google.com/books/edition/Machiavellianism/2tNBDwAAQBAJ?hl=en&gbpv=1 (Add citation to article). His ideas and contributions were widely used in the world of political philosophy to help analyze political leaders and their characters.Https://www.google.com/books/edition/Machiavellianism/2tNBDwAAQBAJ?hl=en&gbpv=1 (Add citation to article).

In the 1970s, American researchers Richard Christie (Add reference to christie wiki page) and Florence Geis (same here), approached Machiavellianism from a psychological viewpoint compared to the already established philosophical ideations."Jadeynmetcalf (talk) 17:18, 6 April 2022 (UTC)Jadeynmetcalf

The Etiology section should be deleted because there is not enough information there and there aren't a lot of sources that provide new information on that topic. Maria.styron

maybe consider combining the "Hot and cold empathy" section with the "Alexithymia" section because they sound super similar and would easily flow together and neither section has a ton of information. Maria.styron

Change the title of the Etiology section to "Machiavellianism in children" or something like that and add new information. Maria.Styron