User:Mariahcruz27/Feminism and racism/Mharmon0718 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Mariahcruz27)


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 * Feminism and racism
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Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead does have a strong overview of what the article will be talking about. I would just take out some of the wording that seem more expressive such as “highly” in the first sentence where feminism and racism are intertwined concepts, it can come off on a not so neutral tone. I also read in the sandbox of Transnational feminism, which was not in the article but I think it should be since that is also considered another form of feminism. Otherwise, the wording of the paragraph and citations in the lead are all up to date as well as, the links to other wiki knowledge pages. Within the content frame, the user did add some updated sources that were related to this topic. Feminism and racism are topics that are usually updated often since these topics that are continuing to grow and gain more knowledge. A lot of the references are from the 1990’s and early 2000’s which I believe could be updated with more information as well as some of the terms being used. I noticed in the Talk page that another user mentioned a lot of the wording being a little biased, which I can still see in some of the paragraphs. While this user did not use any bias, whoever created the article certainly had a few sentences that were. There was also a lot of relation to how women of color are compared to that of white women, I maybe would take out a couple sentences that focused more on the experiences of white women and the comparisons to other women of color. In the intersectionality portion I would also link the wiki page and mention that the theory was brought up by Kimberlé Crenshaw, since this is a very important concept for feminism and racism.

I was a little confused about a couple of the references and sources because certain sentences had about 3 or 4 citations and some of the links did not work. Such as, with the example “However, when it became clear that the right to vote would only be given along race (i.e., to white women) or gender (Black men) lines, white women began to use racist tactics to argue against giving Black men suffrage.: 59 .” I maybe would just clean it up a little bit so that there is a better understanding of which reference they are in relation too. There is also still a few of the citations that have not been added yet that state “citation needed.” Overall, you did a great job with your lead and while in your sandbox I saw you talking more about Transnational Feminism I think you should also add that into the article because that is a newer and important topic that is related to both feminism and racism. Just fix a couple of the grammar issues within that paragraph and it should be good to post.