User:Mariiobs14/User:Pvrla/Yamurikuma/Mariiobs14 Peer Review

General info
Pvrla
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Pvrla/Yamurikuma:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Yamurikuma

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * It does include an introductory sentence that describes the article's topic, but they did not add any new content to this specific part. They did mention the following sections, and it is concise.


 * The content is relevant to the topic, and it is up-to-date. Some content that could be included could be the description of the attire of the festival in more detail, and it does address a historically underrepresented population.


 * The content is neutral and uses an informative tone, there is no opinionated or persuasive content.


 * The content is backed up by reliable sources, but the content does not reflect all of the sources, they are written by a diverse spectrum of authors, and they included peer-reviewed articles. The links work.


 * The content is well organized and it is broken down into sections, there are no grammatical errors. The content is concise.


 * The list of sources is exhaustive and uses reliable pages and peer reviewed journals, the format could be improved to look more like other articles in wikipedia, but the main sections do look similar.


 * The content added does improve the article by adding more information about it, especially the main ritual. The author could add more information on the location, the origins, or as mentioned the attire itself. They could also include the external links box the main article had.