User:Mariocartlover/Prytania Street/Ajohn128 Peer Review

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(Mariocartlover)


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 * User:Mariocartlover/Prytania Street
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On first glance I can tell that you've got to work on some formatting and organization. Be sure to add your headers and bold important information. You're also missing your references. I only put emphasis on this because throughout the project we talk so much about them. It's important to have at least a few in there so far.

As far as your actual content I'd work on your introduction. If a reader was to be looking for quick informational facts on the street they wouldn't pick them up easy. I'd work on more of the history of the street versus its attractions in your introduction. However when it comes to having an "Attractions" section you've got some great information to fill that right up. I would expand more on the demographics as well. You speak of a school on the street and the style of themes. I'd definitely do some more research and expand on those if you don't have that in mind already.

As of right now you just have a bunch of facts in your article. However, it's not a bad start by just getting it all out there on the paper. I think you just have to clean it up a bit and do some serious formatting. Unlike some your street has a lot of facts to play off of so use that to your advantage! Great Job!