User:Marisa Balades/Homelessness in the San Francisco Bay Area/Yaydnew Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Marisa Balades


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 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Marisa%20Balades/Homelessness_in_the_San_Francisco_Bay_Area?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Homelessness in the San Francisco Bay Area

Evaluate the drafted changes
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==== Hotels not Hospitals (very interesting and informative section; not sure if you already know where this section is going to be going but I would start to think about where in the article this section will be before/after) ==== Throughout the course of the pandemic, more nonprofit and non-state actors have had to take the reigns with regards to navigating San Francisco's lack of housing support  (you don't need to have this sentence, you can just head straight into what HnH is ). Hotels not Hospitals (HnH) is a local, community-funded organization that was created expeditiously at the start of the pandemic in 2020 in order to immediately respond to the lack of housing support from the local government and city officials. HnH works to identify hotels and, more recently, apartments that can provide the unhoused community with warm, safe spaces to live since the global pandemic has only inflamed issues of poverty. They are increasingly becoming focused on the creation of long-term housing for the San Francisco community, and have actively fundraised tens of thousands of dollars towards both keeping their current residents in their hotel or apartment arrangements while also getting more people off the streets.

Alongside their fundraising efforts to house the community, they have also emphasized the political economy side of this issue. As of today, HnH has hosted two direct actions to ensure the continuation of proper housing for those who are currently staying in hotels and apartments through HnH. As the organization believes that meaningful political reform has to take place in order for homelessness to see an end, they’ve taken to the streets and social media in order to share their message and encourage others to join and volunteer as well.  (to get the "wikipedia voice" it would be helpful to state the "two direct actions", edit out the phrases "political economy" so you can focus on the direct actions of HnH) 

Hotels not Hospitals views housing as a quintessential human right ' (you can combine this sentence with the next one, have a similar idea). ' They have openly expressed that they believe “[p]eople experiencing homelessness and poverty are not a ‘problem’ to be solved. The real problem is a capitalist system that turns a blind eye to the human suffering in our communities"( add citation) . As a result of this belief, HnH has written to the city about their concerns over the lack of acknowledgement of the unhoused community throughout the duration of the pandemic. They are also able to rely on their community of supporters. HnH states that, “The first step towards building a more humane, compassionate society is to change the way we treat its most marginalized and least privileged members. This project aims for housed and unhoused San Franciscans to partner and work towards such a society,” (add citation)  (HnH). In order to achieve this goal, HnH has created what they refer to as a Community-Supported Housing Model ( maybe you can add the "community-supported housing model as a sub-section to this section) .

The Community-Supported Housing Model relies on community funds to pay for housing expenses such as rent and utilities and the hotel rooms that are rented out for unhoused individuals. In order to obtain these funds, HnH takes to social media, direct actions, and the streets to explain their mission and why continuing to collect community funds is imperative to the sustainability of Community-Supported Housing. This housing model inherently expects that state or city-funding of any type is nonexistent and, instead, relies on trustworthy and consistent community members to donate when they can.

 Overall comments; 

 - very easy to understand what HnH do and what the housing model is 

' - be sure to add your citations/references when you are quoting them or if you bring in information that you got from the sources you are using. '

 - an idea where you can put this section is under San Francisco in the "prevalence and visibility by city" 

' You are doing good job! keep up the good work and take note of my suggestions :) '