User:MarissaPAlit/Carriers (film)/Joereadel Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MarissaPAlit


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:MarissaPAlit/Carriers (film)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Carriers (film)

Lead
The lead section has been improved from the original by naming the director, year of release, and genre in the first sentence and starting a new sentence for plot synopsis.

There is a mention of the COVID-19 pandemic in the lead that isn't mentioned otherwise in the article or cited.

The lead is concise and improved overall from the original.

Content
The added content in the plot section improves the language from the original.

The content in the plot section is up to date and relevant to the subject.

There are no equity gaps addressed.

Tone and balance
The added content is neutral and not biased towards any particular positions.

There are no over or underrepresented viewpoints.

The content doesn't attempt to persuade the reader in any way.

Sources and references
Marissa has cleaned up the sources and references section.

The sources and links all appear to work.

The COVID reference in the lead feels to me like it needs a citation. I found this one, and while it's not great, maybe something along those lines could help improve the article.

Organization
The sentences "Their vehicle has run out of fuel, which transpires to become his tactic to obtain the group's resources." and "Danny and Kate arrive at Turtle Beach the following day, but Danny realized that the beach he and Brian once idolized together is now empty by his brother's absence." might benefit from revision, but the rest of the plot section is broken down in a way that logically describes the main points of the film.

Overall impressions
Marissa's edits have made the page feel more in line with the Wikipedia standards.

The strengths of the article are the updates to the lead section and the references.

The content might be improved with the editing of the aforementioned sentences.