User:Marissabizzario/sandbox

Article Evaluation:

"The Chrysanthemums"

All Copyedits Made To The Article:

• "The focus narrows and finally settles on Elisa Allen cutting down the spent stalks of chrysanthemums in the garden on her husband’s ranch. "

comma after Allen and after chrysanthemums because it's a gerund phase

•"Her husband, Henry, comes from across the yard, where he had been arranging the sale of the thirty steers and offers to take Elisa to town so they can celebrate the sale."

period after steers. Then He offers...

•"He earns a meager living fixing pots and sharpening scissors and knives, traveling from San Diego to Seattle and back every year."

change to : Earning a meager living, he fixes pots...

•"..., traveling from San Diego to Seattle ..."

change to: He travels from San Diego ...

•"When he presses for a small job she becomes annoyed and tries to send him away."

comma after job

•" It turns out the man tossed her chrysanthemum shoots out of his wagon but kept the pot Elisa had put them in."

comma after wagon.

Addition to The Chrysanthemums artcle:

Adding the fights in the plot summary.

(in the first paragraph) "While talking about their plan to go out, Henery jokingly asks Elisa if she would like to see a fight. With disinterest, Elisa refuses and says she wouldn't like it. They agree on dinner and a movie instead."

(in the last Paragraph) "It's then that Elisa brings up an interest in the fights that night. She asks if "women ever go to the fights". Henry answers "Oh sure, some", but reminds her that she probably wouldn't like it. She agrees and says the night out alone will be plenty."

Marissabizzario (talk) 20:43, 8 November 2017 (UTC)