User:Marissarp/Lake Constance/Sophie Bazan Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Marissarp


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Marissarp/Lake_Constance?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lake Constance

Evaluate the drafted changes
Great job staying neutral! Everything was relevant and related to the topic. It was interesting to read about the changes the lake has gone through over the past century, but the first paragraph may need reworking as it got difficult to follow along. Try to use some connecting word or phrases here, as it felt like everything was choppy, especially beginning each sentence with the increase in ___ led to______. I would also like to read more about what human influences took place on the lake, if you can find anything on that. I liked learning about the different stations dedicated to limnology research. It would be interesting to read about the research that has taken place at these stations. I also think an into paragraph would be helpful to use as well. In text citations are also needed. Overall, great job!