User:Markowijaya/Evaluate an Article

Name of article: Bell Let's Talk
Mental health is a topic that has a lot of stigmas in most communities. Thus, the reason I chose to edit this article is to shed some of the stigmas by providing accurate information on the internet to people.

Feedback

 * 1) The article should include more references to back up the claims that are stated in the page. For example, this sentence on the introductory paragraph, 'it is the single largest corporate commitment to mental health in Canada.', should be backed up with another source to prove the accuracy.
 * 2) Some of the sources are not working and thus, should be removed or updated. For example, reference number 9 to support this claim, 'the campaign began with a donation of $1 million to the Royal Ottawa Hospital’s Telemedicine program', is not working.
 * 3) The article should remain neutral at all times. I thought that this sentence, 'Bell Let's Talk Day 2020 broke records again!', is not appropriate due to the exclamation mark at the end of the sentence which shows support or excitement for the achievement.
 * 4) There is a grammatical error on this sentence, 'the program is supported by dozens of other self-described 'team members,' who's stories surrounding their experiences with mental health are promoted on the Bell Let's Talk website and other Bell Media properties leading up to Bell Let's Talk Day'. 'Whose stories' should be the right words instead of 'who's stories'.

Article's Strengths

 * 1) The article has done a tremendous work on providing accurate numerical data with appropriate references to back up its claim. For instance, this claim, 'the year was marked by a $1 million contribution to the Bell Let's Talk movement’s own fund in support of Canada’s northern territories and a partnership with the Alberta Government to provide better mental health support for youth in the province', was not only cited but also supported on the reference number 18.
 * 2) The article is concise, clear and only includes information that is important to the development of the article. It is not too lengthy to bore the readers and provides enough factual statements that engage the readers' attention.

Evaluation on Article's Talk Page
Link to feedback: Talk:Bell Let's Talk