User:Marshfrancis14/David Keightley/Skylily19 Peer Review

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Everything in this article is appropriately centered on David Keightley. There is one particular run-on sentence I located that was kind of distracting to me:

1. "He then returned to the United States to complete his doctoral studies at Columbia under the Swedish Sinologist Hans Bielenstein, and received a Ph.D. in 1969 with a dissertation entitled "Public Work in Ancient China: A Study of Forced Labor in the Shang and Early Chou."

a. A possible way to correct this run-on sentence is to split the sentence into two after Hans Bielenstein.

The article is as neutral as it gets. It is quite straight-forward and to-the-point about David Keightley and his achievements and work. I do not believe Mr. Keightley is underrepresented or overrepresented in this article. There is a good balance. The information gathered on Mr. Keightley is followed up by reputable, reliable references. These sources also seem to be neutral.