User:Martinapovolo/Beverly Hills Cannabis Club/Iskang15 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Martinapovolo


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Martinapovolo/Beverly Hills Cannabis Club


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Beverly Hills Cannabis Club

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Hi Martina! Nice job on the article so far and, when compared to its current live version, there are definitely clear improvements made by your contributions. Some things I have noted during this peer-review include:


 * In regards to your lead, I think that it can be even more beneficial when given a brief introduction/definition to what cannabis clubs are as a whole.
 * There also seems to be an article of Cannabis Social Clubs, which could be incorporated into your article in some ways as information. Possibly as another link in your "See also" section.
 * Also maybe adding some information in regards to the significance of having a cannabis club specifically in Beverly Hills, could add more content for your article.
 * In regards to the section about the "Known Clients of Shuman", I think it could beneficial in linking the celebrities to their respective articles (if they do have one), just in case if a reader would like to know more information about the clients.
 * Also if possible, I think that it may be more beneficial if you can find another secondary source in regards to her client list, rather than just relying on her website.

Response
Thanks so much! I agree with everything you said. - Martina