User:Martinapovolo/Beverly Hills Cannabis Club/Reemslim Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Martinapovolo


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Martinapovolo/Beverly Hills Cannabis Club


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Beverly Hills Cannabis Club

Evaluate the drafted changes
The edits that Martina has added to the "Beverly Hills Cannabis Club" article are very impressive! All the information added is relevant to the topic and provide a deeper look into The Beverly Hills Cannabis Club and Cheryl Shuman. The content added provides the reader with a more detailed reasoning as to why the club was started, the members of the club, and the reasoning behind it. Through the extra information added to the article, the reader becomes aware of the medical situation Cheryl was in, and why she turned to cannabis for relief. Martina adding this allows a more well-rounded image of The Beverly Hills Cannabis Club.

The references are dated back to 2017, but considering they are only a few months older than three years, I would say they are recent enough to be considered accurate. The only thing I would recommend is to find references that are more recent and portray the current status of the club- kind of a "where are they now" situation. This would allow the audience to be up to date with the club, Cheryl, and the celebrity clients. With this being said; most of the current links provided by Martina are credible, unbiased, and working. They include sites such as New York Times, and Cheryl Shuman's personal site. However, the CNBC link did not work, and the vimeo reference may be un-credible, I would double check this!

The writing is very clear and the tone remains unbiased. As I mentioned above, I really like how you dug into Shuman's life more, however I think you can go even deeper. Maybe write about the controversy of the club, how it impacted the hills, and/or what Cheryl is up to now? I just felt as though you left me wanting more! The organization of the article is great and provides proper headings, and sections off the information accordingly, as well as includes extra links.

There are no images included, this is something that you could revise and post!

Overall, the content provided improved the quality of the article drastically and brought the audience more information and depth. The way it could be improved is to add more information, go into more depth, be more recent, and add photos! Overall, great great job!

Reem


 * Hey and . Thanks to  for a really encouraging and helpful review!  I think she did a great job summarizing the changes that you made to the article and how they are helpful.  I also totally agree with her suggestions to try to find more recent references, try to give an updated portrayal of the club, to clean up the references, and to go into greater depth into Shuman's life and the history of the club. I wonder how the legalization and widespread acceptance of cannabis in California has changed things. I also like the suggestion of adding an image, but I caution  to inform yourself about Wikipedia's norms around images and copyright before you go looking for an image.


 * By the way,, on Wikipedia you can automatically add your signature using four tildes ( ~ ) or by clicking Insert and then your signature in the visual editor.


 * Groceryheist (talk) 18:56, 3 February 2021 (UTC)