User:Martinapovolo/Beverly Hills Cannabis Club/TylerOliver7 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Martinapovolo


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Martinapovolo/Beverly Hills Cannabis Club


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Beverly Hills Cannabis Club

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello Martina, I really enjoy how unique of an article you chose and can truly see how much this article will improve after you have finished working on it!


 * I think the lead is off to a good start, but it would help to state exactly what the Beverly Hills cannabis club is. For example if it is just a membership club or a business, or a dispensary - it would be nice to specifically know what it is.
 * I like how you added a list of different celebrities who have been know to be clients of the club. I think the article could benefit from the use of pictures to highlight some of the most famous people on this list.
 * maybe you might consider adding a description as to why each person was a client.
 * I like that you added a section that details the life of Cheryl Shuman, she has her own wikipedia page which you could reference in your article.
 * I think you are doing a very nice job at remaining neutral in your content, you just have to continue finding content to add to continue improving the article.
 * Overall the article is already improved a lot and I am looking forward to seeing its progress.
 * One way you might be able to improve your draft is add a section that details what the club is primarily known/used for