User:MaryGrace J. Larsen/Bromoethane/Tlewis10020 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MaryGrace J. Larsen


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:MaryGrace J. Larsen/Bromoethane
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bromoethane

Evaluate the drafted changes
The suggested updates and edits will most definitely add more information to the original article, it is a good idea to continue to add information along those lines. However, those typical edits: BP, mm, MP, FP, etc, are in a text box to the right of the article instead of within the body of the article so maybe consider finding a way to incorporate that feature instead of using body space. The photos that are suggested in the edits will definitely help the reader visualize the information described in the article. Make sure to correctly cite the images. Since the edits are separated from the original text of the article, it would be more benefical to see all of the information compiled together to get a true feel of how it flows together and what edits you will make (grammatically, etc) to the original text versus just additions. The original article (Bromoethane) already has your suggested edits:BP, mm, MP, FP. Thus, it is somewhat confusing as to why those edits are being "Added"; I could be possibly be reading your edits wrong due to the structure of your sandbox. The biggest suggestion would be to consolidate the new information and the original information in order to decide the flow of the article.