User:Marye.hoban/sandbox

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To Build a Fire

 * As soon as I started to read the introduction to the wiki page, the grammatical errors were noticeable. In the third sentence, someone was describing the difference between the book and the movie, with the comparison of "has become an often." The phrase was choppy and it showed a bias opinion leaning toward the movie. Another noticeable error was when someone was writing about the fires being put out they wrote "but all got put out" which continues with the choppy theme of the summary, thus far. I also found it too informal for an unbias summary.
 * The unnecessary words ("then" and "and"), the spelling mistakes ("through" instead of "though"), and tangents are distracting.
 * in the "Themes" the themes listed are good, but someone wrote about the man's judgment vs the dog's instincts and "judgment" lean towards a negative opinion of the man compared to the dog, through a negative connotation
 * Repetitive phrases used in the themes are "as soon as" "as well as" and I'm able to catch them and most of the grammatical errors because I often make them.
 * The first reference or citation didn't directly lead to a website that was connected to the story.
 * There were only four citations and the last three was the same one and I had no idea where it was supposed to lead me. It didn't lead anywhere.
 * Overall, I'm able to pick out what the authors are attempting to get across, but the tangents, repeated phrases, as well as the unnecessary words are a distraction to a story that could've been written in a total of two phrases.

A Rose for Emily

 * I just finished adding two citations for this story and it was awful!
 * 1) I didn't know what story to add a citation to, so I looked up the list of stories the class has read the semester and looked at each story's wiki page. I decided on A Rose story, because of Parker's Back, because I already knew I wanted to add to the theme of a story because I'm bad at picking themes for stories. The Storm had too many themes and they were mostly based on a writer's opinion.
 * 2) A Rose was the surprising ending, but it worked, because I was more familiar with the themes already chosen and could pick out more examples in the story then I could with other stories.
 * 3) I didn't know how to reuse a citation so I looked it up on the class practice page, but it told me to find the "re-use" button and I couldn't so I just type the reference number I was re-using.
 * 4) This project is very detailed and we have to use a lot of technology for it and I don't like either so this project is difficult. That is the main reason I've off on it. I didn't want to ask for help because the directions were given to the class and they seemed pretty straightforward. I did enjoy learning about the behind scenes for Wikipedia though because I've always enjoyed learning the behind the scenes on anything from how an author came up with the idea for a story, to who and how a movie is filmed. I guess I'm just nosy.