User:Marymountain/Bullshit Jobs/DylnC Peer Review

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Marymountain
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 * User:Marymountain/Bullshit Jobs
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 * Bullshit Jobs

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, the draft is informative and showcases the topic well. Although there is room for more content, Graeber's position is prevalent and clear. In fact, I would say that his position is so clear that it gives the draft a bit of a slant in Graeber's favor. This may be fixed with some edits in the language used throughout. Some phrases have a bit of a casual and argumentative tone to them that paints Graeber's position into the more preferable position. Thus, the draft could be revised slightly to create a more neutral reading experience. The sources are good and the links work.