User:Marysarkis/1933 Long Beach earthquake/Amoreland22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

user Marysarkis (and their group members)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Marysarkis/1933 Long Beach earthquake
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

1933 Long Beach earthquake

Evaluate the drafted changes
There is not a lot of information about the ideas you have for adding to this article beyond noting that you will add/incorporate new information into the causes section that already exists. So I would definitely take the time as a group to write out a focused and detailed plan. For the two sentences you have elaborating on what you will be adding into the causes section, you need to include sources since I can't verify where you found that information and its reliability. I read your article evaluation and noticed you mention that "normally background should be first" as in there should be a background section before discussing damages and aftermath. I think the addition of a section like that would be a good idea and I suggest you consider creating your own in order to include a more thorough description of the event happening. I would also suggest you take time to go find a bunch of sources on the 1933 Long Beach earthquake and determine which are most useful since there currently isn't any content for me to evaluate in your references section. The article already has a decent amount of images so I would generally say to focus on actual descriptive content rather than finding any new images. Once you find more information you want to add, make sure to organize it in a clear way and you should be on track!

Response to Peer Review (Ricardo)
I do agree that we do not have that much information yet regarding the ideas we have for adding to our article. We are all currently working in our separate sandboxes and doing our own independent research on our article and coming together to exchange ideas and narrow them down even further. We will eventually have a more organized and well detailed article with proper ideas and sections laid out. Thank you for your suggestion regarding the background is a good idea, which is also something we have discussed as a group and will eventually add to our article. It will definitely add more depth to the article and give a better understanding as well.