User:Marysarkis/1933 Long Beach earthquake/Huzmir1014 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Marysarkis


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Marysarkis/1933_Long_Beach_earthquake?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * 1933 Long Beach earthquake

Evaluate the drafted changes
There is a very well drafted and thought out evaluation of the mother article in the sandbox draft that includes many valid critiques and criticism for each segment of the article. Moreover, possible additions that could be done by the team are laid out in this paragraph and provides a general idea of the changes the group wishes to implement into their article. Moreover, in their skeleton draft of the segments of the article they've added in a lead which is a new addition to the article. An issues I see is a slight lack in content or legitimate drafted additions the group wishes to place into the article. There are many great broad ideas and general pathways that the group has outlined and now they need to start working on making additions that could be added to the mother article. Secondly, there are no references or citations added which is related to the lack of concrete additions. Overall the group seems to be on track with a good foundation for their contribution to the mother article. Cant wait to see what they come up with.

Response to Peer Review
According to the peer review it was suggested "in their skeleton draft of the segments of the article they've added in a lead which is a new addition to the article" which is definitely a good idea. The lack of content is a current issue that is known and being addressed as we continue to add in more information to the Causes section we will be overall adding a lot to. The references will also be updated. This peer review feedback has been helpful to help strengthen our article as we continue to add and develop more on the article.