User:Marzipan Calicoco/Gender-neutral language/Benevolent Bat Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Marzipan Calicoco


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Marzipan%20Calicoco/Gender-neutral_language?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Gender-neutral language

Evaluate the drafted changes
Marzipan Calicoco is working on the Controversy section of this article in their sandbox. They have included both the Canada and France section, however there is nothing changed from either of these from the original article. However, it is helpful to put these two sections here so while they continue to work on this section the work they contribute can be cohesive to the work that is already there. They have added two more parts to this section in their sandbox, United States and Argentina as well as two more references to be included with each part. While the sentences that they have added do well with summarizing the content originally as well as up to date, they both seem to be from articles written in magazines and not taken from academic journals or textbooks. My only suggestion would be to try to find references that still support what they have said but that are more reliable and won't be removed once the sandbox is published. Overall, I believe that they have done a good job so far with the content they want to add and they should continue to find more information for these two sections.