User:MathisBitton/The Public and its Problems/Monikolov Peer Review

This is a very extensive and well-written Wikipedia page. I applaud you for your clear dedication to the project, and the research and effort that you've put into building the page. I can tell that you're very passionate about this book. However, my main advice for you would be to simplify your work and make it more accessible to the wider public. While I appreciate the depth in which you delve into this The Public and its Problems, there are definitely times where it feels like you're using jargon where you don't necessarily need to. My view on Wikipedia is that it should be very readable and accessible to the common person, so you should go for simplicity in your writing whenever possible. For example, in your abstract paragraph, you state that Dewey contends that Democracy is an "ethos." While the Wikipedia page for "ethos" is linked, I think it would further be helpful to add a clause that briefly describes what you mean by "ethos" in this instance.

Moreover, within your sections dividing this book into multiple parts, I feel like your entries feel more like a book report than a generalized summary. You should aim to concisely restate the main ideas of the book whenever possible. For example, instead of making frequent use of quotes, I think in many instances you should paraphrase Dewey's ideas using your own words, especially for longer excerpts. In part one, in your 15th citation, you cite a quote that is 3 lines long. This comes after another quote two sentences earlier and before another quote two sentences after. I'd advise you to condense these ideas and paraphrase them. When you integrate a lot of quotes into your writing, you run the risk of having to analyze them, and this is tricky because analysis typically implies inserting your own judgments rather than maintaining a neutral tone.

Overall, incredible job! I for sure learned a lot while reading this page, and I look forward to seeing how you further revise it.