User:Matthew.meyers5/Citizens Convention for Climate/AnnaRO2021 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Matthew.meyers5)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Matthew.meyers5/Citizens Convention for Climate


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Citizens Convention for Climate

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Matthew!

First of all, great work! I am very impressed by your draft and the incorporation of it to the current version of the article. (I write ideas for minor changes in brackets like this :-).

About the draft:

I really appreciate the clear structure of the draft as well as the short and coincides headlines (be aware that headlines only have a big letter in the beginning and not in the rest of the words - e.g., "Eighth Session" where "session" must begin with a small s). Also, I really appreciate the length of the sections in the draft and how you carefully have referenced to the key facts of the article (be aware to adjust the dates in the Reference section according to what Wikipedia "wants"/what is in red writing). (Also, maybe be consistent and note all the links that are in French, as you already have done with some of the links.) Furthermore, it is great that you have linked to other Wikipedia articles throughout the page.

The language is neutral and to the point. The writing has a nice flow and it is easy to understand for a non-native English speaker like me ;-).

As for the content, I find that you have chosen out important information. You've managed to boil down the most important facts in the paragraphs and still have chosen out relevant details.

If you decide to write the last three sections ("Proposals", "Government reception", and "Scholar analysis and criticism") this would be a very strong and carefully written Wikipedia article. I encourage you to do so if you have the time.

One small thing: I am not sure what you have in mind for the section "Theory" but I'm curious to find out :-).

About the current article:

Firstly, I find it interesting to see how you interact with the other Wikipedia users on the Talk page of the article. You are good at explaining what you have done in your changes. Also, it's great that you inform the other users about that you will continue to improve the article in the coming weeks.

In relation to the article itself, I just have two comments. You have incorporated your draft in a good way that improves the article and also respects/work with the already existing material. Additionally, remember to add to the lead section when you are done with improving the article.

All in all, you have done a very good job so far. I am impressed. Feel free to reach out if you want to discuss anything or have any questions. I hope that my review has been helpfull.

All the best,

Anna :-)