User:MatthewSchaublin/Cognition/Garciba0 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MatthewSchaublin


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:MatthewSchaublin/Cognition
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cognition

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: Your draft mainly focused on a body section, not exactly the lead. However, I think that it would be good to insert an introduction statement, covering your added sections, in the lead section.

Content: The content you added it relevant and up-to-date. It also fills a gap in the historical development of cognitive psychology. I think you could bulk up each paragraph a little bit more by adding some more details for each statement. It seems like each section was a intro sentence, a semi-content sentence, and then a conclusion statement, so I think you just need more content based sentences within each paragraph before concluding.

Tone & Balance: Everything seems neutral and not biased. Since you're focused more on the history, everything is also pretty factual and not in favor of a certain perspective.

Sources & References: I feel like you can add more citations for certain key words that lead to other wikipedia articles, just in case some of the terminology you used can easily be referenced so that everyone can understand the sentence. Your sources do look credible. Some of your sources required money for access, but the University gave me free access, however it is not equally accessible to everyone to refer to. Or if you can find those articles on a different site that allows you to open for free then I would cite that instead.

Organization: Everything is really well-written, concise and clear. I don't see any grammatical or spelling errors. I would think about adding Subsection headings just to organize your content a little better and give the reader a preface of what you're covering. As of now, it just looks like a long piece of information and daunting for a reader who just wants to skim or find out certain information about cognitive psychology.

Images & Media: You didn't include any images or media. I'm not sure what type of images you can find to match your information but, of course, it's always nice to look at images so if you can find something that'd be nice.