User:MatthewStika/Emily Blackwell/Hyperion0210 Peer Review

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Matthew Stika
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Looking at the main article, the lead needs to be expanded. It only talks about two things: her degree and what happened 83 years after she died. I think adding in 3-4 sentences about her works in the lead section especially with her infirmary it could elevate that section.

I like what you added into the early life and education. It really puts into perspective her early life and how she had a very good education especially for a female. The one thing I don't quite know if it fits or is relevant is the "father became an active abolitionist". I don't really know if its necessary to add this unless it had further effect on her character, hospital, reputation.

I think you could add a whole new section where it is what happens after her death. This section would include what happened to the infirmary, her medical college, and the overall effect she had during and after her life. She was a very influential women being the second to hold a medical degree and I think the article should highlight more of the after effects we are still feeling today from her trail blazing.

Good job with citations, you have cited every sentence you have added and one more to the original article, so keep that going!

I think overall there is a ton to be added to the career section. You can expand what the effect she had on the women's central association of relief, the united states sanitary commission, and her medical college. All of these are talked about very briefly in the article and there is a lot that can be expanded upon. For instance you could try to get numbers for how many nurses she trained for the civil war and the effect that those had; IE lower fatality etc. And for the infirmary, you could, if you have information on it, talk about how she was able to fundraise and what it cost for her to make her hospital. In addition you can add a new section called "legacy" or something like that which goes over the stuff that happened after her death and how things changed or didn't.