User:MaxD02/Laboratory glassware/Tim Baltmore Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MaxD02


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:MaxD02/Laboratory_glassware?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Laboratory glassware

Evaluate the drafted changes
 Lead: 

The lead section of the full article doesn't really deal with the history of laboratory glassware and I feel that is appropriate.

 Content: 

The content added so far seems to be very relevant. I enjoyed the discussion on WWI's impact on the production and development of laboratory glass. I would be interested in seeing how the advancements in glassmaking aligned with the development of specific specialty lab equipment. I like the added portion about Mary the Jewess and I feel that could be considered an instance of bridging the content equity gap.

 Tone and Balance: 

The tone of the added portions are neutral and formal. I would describe them as very "matter of fact" rather than persuasive.

 Sources and references: 

The sources referenced seem reputable and reliable. Sources 1 and 3 look like they have been drawn upon pretty heavily, which I don't think is an issue at this point. Going forward, you may consider referencing a wider selection of materials.

 Organization: 

The history section of the article is consistently chronological except for the part where 16th century Venice was mentioned and then it jumps back to the 14th-16th century.

 Overall Impressions: 

This draft looks really good, the content you added was engaging and well-put. I think if you continue this work and keep the few notes that I had in mind you are going to end up with a great article.