User:MaxW795/James Monroe (computer scientist)/Scoobyysnacks Peer Review

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MaxW795
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:MaxW795/James_Monroe_%28computer_scientist%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
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Evaluate the drafted changes
In the lead section, you should add the year he was born and if he had passed away, the year he died. The sentences are well-written but because this is wikipedia, the article needs to be brief. There are a few phrases that can be cut such as "Most notably". I think you could also change Clarence Ellis to a link that can be clicked on to guide others to his article. "This also endowed Monroe with the honor of being the first African-American professor to be given a tenure permanent professorship at any service academy of the United States.

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In that phrase you can get rid of the word also."they were able to raise two sons together." I might be wrong, but this sounds slightly biased. Instead of saying they were able just say they raised two songs together.