User:Maxmattaaa/User:Maxmattaaa/Concussions in American football/Aodum58 Peer Review

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This article provides adequate information that I was not already aware of which kept the article engaging. I think a change you could make is instead of saying "this article shows" just go straight to the information because the citation shows you got the information from an article. Your lead showed me the importance of the topic you are writing about. I think you organized your article and information well. Your article reflects almost all perspectives. The content was neutral I could not guess the perspective. Your article did not focus mainly focus on positive or negative there is a good middle ground. All of your statements had a citation, your citations were reliable and you had a variety of different ones. After reading your article I think I am going to add more information to my personal article as well as make my article more in depth.