User:Maxmattaaa/User:Maxmattaaa/Concussions in American football/Darius Crew Peer Review

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This article explains exactly what the topic is about. I am very impressed with how long the article is. The changes that I suggest the author apply to the article are to check the dates in his citations and check the grammar. The most important thing the author could improve is probably the dates on the citations. I can say he has a lot more information than my article and that make me feel like I should consider adding more research to my article. I am very satisfied with this article and the importance of the topic. The lead does list more of the important information in fact lots of it. Again, there's plenty of detail in this article so in my opinion I don't think there was much missed. Yes, the sections are organized well and are in a sensible order. Each section and every source given has something to do with the topic. The article reflects on all viewpoints including the head of the NFL, the coaches, the players etc. The article does draw conclusion but does not try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view. Reading the article, I instantly know the perspective of the author. The are not words that don't feel neutral. the author gave the names and who they were to everyone he mentioned in the article. I do feel like this article focuses more on the negative aspects and list very little positive. At the end of each paragraph is some type of source or citation connected to it. Each paragraph only has one source at the end of it and that would make each source pretty much balanced out and each paragraph is pretty balanced out as well. Although there's not many sources attached to each paragraph, each source does match up with the paragraphs. On my article I plan to check my sources, seek more research, and make sure my sources match with my topics.