User:May erica/Translanguaging/Kevinmount Peer Review

General info
May erica
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:May_erica/Translanguaging&oldid=1215337420
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Translanguaging

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead
Not relevant as this has not been edited. The translanguaging article is quite long, so it appears the author is focusing exclusively on the History section.

Content
The concept added under history, referring to the mid-20th century and how languages were kept separate during instruction instead of allowing students to switch back and forth between languages, was not stated in the original Wikipedia article. So, this is added context to the historical perspective of translanguaging. However, there are multiple ideas here that are provided without any citation. While it is an inclusion of information, there is no way to verify whether it is factual. This also prevents me from speaking about whether the content is up to date, as the source cannot be checked. In terms of the third paragraph, information is presented on how the idea of translanguaging has evolved over time, providing perspectives from 1967 and then an updated understanding from 2003.

Tone and Balance
The content that has been added seems neutral and shows the evolution of understanding language, both bilingualism and translanguaging, throughout history. While it does put a large emphasis on the Welsh researcher, upon some recent further research and reading a few introductory texts on translanguaging, I have verified that the history of translanguaging does emerge from this Welsh researcher.

Sources and References
The updates provided on the sandbox page are cited using parentheses at the end of the idea instead of using Wikipedia's citation tools, so there is no easy way to see the full citation for the sources provided, making it challenging to check whether the information is correct. However, I have gone ahead and used Google to find some of these sources. In the second paragraph, the Welsh term for translanguaging seems to be very similar to the second sentence of a journal published in 2018. The structure of the sentence is very similar. For convenience, I have copied the sentence from the beginning of the article and then compared it to the language from the Wikipedia article. The structure of the sentence is very similar, and I noticed two pieces of context were added that may not necessarily be true. For instance, is translanguaging only a term coined in the context of literacy lessons, and was the phrase coined only when Welsh and English are delivered during those lessons? While the author of the term is Welsh and was probably referring to the instruction of English and Welsh when he coined the term, did he mean for the term translanguaging to encompass all types of lessons where two or more languages are used? If so, then the Wikipedia article is a bit misleading. I have bolded the section that is quite similar to the original article.

Wikipedia Article: "the term trawsleithu (translanguaging) to refer to the use of two languages (Welch and English) during the same literacy lesson"

Translanguaging 2018 Article: "‘Trawsieithu’—a Welsh term coined by Cen Williams, and later translated into English as ‘translanguaging’—was constructed as a purposeful cross-curricular strategy for ‘the planned and systematic use of two languages for teaching and learning inside the same lesson’"

Organization
While the content that has been added under the word history on the sandbox page is organized in terms of the information provided, I am unsure exactly where this will be put into the larger history on the Wikipedia article, as the previous content is pasted above and then the new additions are pasted below. It would be clearer to indicate exactly where the content would be placed to ensure that there is flow. It is clear where the second paragraph has been placed about the Welsh educator; however, I wonder where the evolution of the definition of translanguaging would come into this section. The content does not have any grammatical or spelling errors and is well written.

Images and Media
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Overall impressions
The content that has been added, particularly about the separation of bilingual education, has added further context to this article. However, this information needs a few citations, as it has not been able to be verified. The added content is well written, clear, and concise. To make improvements, it should be made clear exactly where this content will be added in the history section, and the citations provided should be reflected using Wikipedia's citation tools. Furthermore, the case presented above, which has a similar structure and language, should be looked at to make sure that this is not a case of plagiarism.